How Kindness Can Destroy Someone: Reader Feedback That Hits Different
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Views: 1981 | Likes: 21 | Comments: 18 Hello. I'm a newbie writing a novel on Munpia for the first time.
I'm shamelessly coming here to promote it despite only having eyes on it.
I've serialized up to episode 20 now, but the stats are honestly pretty rough lol.
I figure this is the price I pay for writing the dark stuff I want to write.
Please take a look at my novel [Insania], which I'm writing for the first time.
Cold, honest feedback is always welcome.
I'm not perfect, but since I wrote it in third-person omniscient perspective, it might feel uncomfortable when you first read it.
I'd appreciate it if you could help me so that it can become a stepping stone for growth.
[General] The problem with that dark fantasy isn't the content itself, but rather the writing style is hard to read. The main issues are: 1) Too much overlapping/repetition in sentences, 2) Adjectives stuffed in front of every noun making it hard to read, 3) Way too many onomatopoeia. When you combine all three, the conclusion is 'there's barely any content being conveyed relative to the number of characters.' This makes it drag on regardless of the actual story. It seems like the author's personal habitβtrimming it down would probably be better. Fighting! πͺ
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A debut writer with terrible grades asking for feedback on their work.
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And then a reader, packing politeness to the brim, gives feedback that it's not a trend problemβit's just straight up bad writing. Teaches them a lesson real hard.
Seunghee, close the door quick
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11 comments
This level of roasting should be reported to the police
If you report it to the police, they'd probably arrest the writer instead
They turned the writer into ground beef...
That's some solid, thorough editing right there. Must feel so appreciated.
If you can't jump over it, it's a wall. If you can, it's a stepping stone.
the algorithm really said 'let's make people question everything good about themselves' and here we are π
Usually when people write like that with repetition, you'd instinctively feel something's off...
Even just writing internet comments, when the same word repeats I get annoyed
That's why you gotta re-read your work multiple times after writing, guess they were busy
I used to write like that on purpose when they told me to write pages and pages of essays lmao but then I'd end up with so much to say I'd have to cut it down anyway, whatever
That's how Russian novelists wrote when they got paid by word count γ γ
This is legit dedication tbh
Finally someone said it!! People took advantage of my kindness so many times and I was just sitting there confused wondering why being nice didn't work
Doesn't have to follow it 100%, but it's solid feedback worth considering. Today's teacher.
this is hitting different at 3am, reminds me of that one person who literally drained my entire energy because I was too nice to say no
They said repetitive words mean you don't know what you wanna write. So you gotta watch out for: writing where you don't know what you're trying to say, writing where you don't know what you wrote, and writing that's just stuffed with whatever you feel like doing.
Same goes for comics
wait this title is wild π literally never thought about it this way but now i can't stop thinking about how my niceness got me walked all over
okay but this is actually deep, kindness can def be weaponized against you if you're not careful, learned that the hard way lol
not me feeling personally attacked by a reddit post rn, this is exactly what happened with my ex bestie
honestly this makes sense? too much of anything is bad, even kindness, balance is key i guess π€·